I loved it, though I think she needs some good beta-readers. In addition to basic word errors, I had a bigger problem in that I could never quite figure out where the story was taking place. Several clues seemed to suggest somewhere in the US while the language was decidedly UK. That made it more than a little confusing and I never developed any solid sense of place, something which I think would have made the story even stronger.I just read Emma's review and am linking to it because I think she nails it perfectly.